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Linda
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 28, 2004 10:13 am    Post subject: Choice - Johanna Albee Reply with quote

Hi Johanna,

I like the rhythm in your first two stanzas, and your rhyme. Why did you change? When writing about highly controversial issues, or deeply emotional ones, a good rhythm and rhyme scheme will normally carry the message better.

If you decide to play around with some closed forms, let me know. I'll post some of the patterns for you. Trying to conform to them is good practice and it helps you eliminate unnecessary words. I know that free verse has been popular, but for the past few years poets have been leaning toward closed forms. The poem that won 1st place in Orlando this year was a Sestina.

But, thatís just a suggestion. Keep writing!

Linda
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