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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 8:36 pm    Post subject: Group poem 1: complete Reply with quote

Dark dreams and silver wishes,
Crimson tides reflect auburn sky,
A girl stares at herself in the mirror,
Emerald wisps of falcate eye,
Broken hearts and hopes that die,
Her weathered hopes uncovered,
blossom in the light of day.
The vein of an unassuming leaf,
Or the crest of a falling star,she trys
to catch the pieces before they slip into the abyss
and the man's too old to add to the poem
Words of beauty she longs to hear,
crescent moon and fallen tear,
more quickly was the old man toiling in slow imagery,
for all the stasis more quickly aging,
a more voracious mind was raging,
For all the world just keeps on changing,
and wouldn't have rhymed like that if not in excuses and regressing,
but she weeps her losses all the same,
as if anyone who cared ever came.
There's a finger in my salad
smaller than that in my brain.
just the thought and i turn pallid
And for now this story has come fail’d.


hmm.. very interesting isn't it? hehe I thought this was pretty fun.. so we shall do another one...

Anyway this poem deserves a title.. anyone have any suggestions?
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 10:47 pm    Post subject: omitted Reply with quote

You omitted my last line. The shame.
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 1:42 pm    Post subject: Re: omitted Reply with quote

mattt wrote:
You omitted my last line. The shame.


yes yes.. well I omitted all lines that were said.
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 1:47 pm    Post subject: Re: omitted Reply with quote

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mattt wrote:
You omitted my last line. The shame.


yes yes.. well I omitted all lines that were said.
and sorry the guest was me.. i forgot to log in
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 23, 2005 12:28 pm    Post subject: Poem title Reply with quote

How about the first line? It seems to fit most of the poem...except at the end what happened? Oh wait I know, Harry, Matt, and DaveR happened (I'm guessing) Geesh guys way to mess up the seriousness of the poem! Evil or Very Mad Just kidding! Very Happy I love you guys but it did turn out a bit odd at the end (different than I thought it would) well ttyl Cool
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 02, 2005 6:44 pm    Post subject: Re: Poem title Reply with quote

Heidi wrote:
How about the first line? It seems to fit most of the poem...except at the end what happened? Oh wait I know, Harry, Matt, and DaveR happened (I'm guessing) Geesh guys way to mess up the seriousness of the poem! Evil or Very Mad Just kidding! Very Happy I love you guys but it did turn out a bit odd at the end (different than I thought it would) well ttyl Cool


hey but that's how most great poems are lol
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 7:46 pm    Post subject: poem Reply with quote

Yes this is true, just thought it ended up vastly different than I would have imagined it ending but that's okay, it makes for an interesting poem!
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 11:36 am    Post subject: Re: poem Reply with quote

Heidi wrote:
Yes this is true, just thought it ended up vastly different than I would have imagined it ending but that's okay, it makes for an interesting poem!


most definitely.
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